Nazuma's bundle of translyrics

Hi everyone, I sing Japanese nd English songs and stuffs,   
all the english covers I do, I write the translyrics myself, sooooo I figured why not share them :'D

Aria(hatsune miku) English:

Paranoia (hatsune miku) English :

SPiCa (hatsune miku) English:

Caged Baby Dragon (Megurine Luka) English:

Mekakucity Actors OP: Days English:

inner arts (IA) English:

Tokyo Ghoul:Unravel English:

I listened to your SPiCa and Paranoia covers. I like your voice, but it is often hard to understand what you are saying.  Sometimes your voice sounds really quiet; this applies to several parts of Paranoia. The part of Paranoia where ‘hatred’ is repeated 4 times sounds odd due to mixing.
 
The lyrics are fine enough. However, there are several words missing from the lyrics written down when compared to your dub.
 
EX in SPiCa:
-Sung: their countenance reflecting the window JUST like a kiss
-Written: their countenance reflecting the window like a kiss
-The ‘just’ is missing in the written lyrics
 
A suggestion, your lyrics have paragraphs but are very hard to sing since there is no clear distinction between lines.
 
EX your lyrics:
We watched the stars in total bliss, their countenance reflecting the window like a kiss
and while we had this moment together,  it felt like we were there forever
 
EX how I suggest:
We watched the stars in total bliss,
Their countenance reflecting the window
Just like a kiss
 
Your lyrics do not appear to follow the syllables at times. That is another reason why I was having a hard time trying to sing along with your SPiCa lyrics.
 
EX in SPiCa:
like a kiss
-has 4 syllables while ‘utsushiteta’ has 5
 
SPiCa did not really rhyme but Caged Baby Dragon and Paranoia did. I am assuming that your SPiCa lyrics are older. Perhaps you could go back and rewrite them and do a remake cover of the song if rhyming is important to you.
 
A couple of parts of your lyrics seemed to be worded wrong and had a few typos.
 
EX in Mekakucity Actors OP:
Its so quiet now that the laughter has surrendered to the silence I just dont know why
Im doing my best, not to cry
-All three contractions are missing their ‘
-The first sentence sounded like it was worded wrong and or is missing a word or a punctuation sign. ” to the silence I just dont know why” You ‘just don’t know why’ what?
It would make more sense if the sentence were worded a few different ways:
‘It’s so quiet now that the laughter has surrendered to the silence, I don’t know why, but
I’m doing my best, not to cry’
 
‘It’s so quiet now that the laughter has surrendered to the silence, but I don’t know why
Now, I’m just trying, not to cry’
 
Either way sounds more grammatically correct. I liked the scientific sort of words you used in SPiCa like ‘circumpolarity’ until I looked up circumpolarity and realized that when used in that tense, circumpolarity is not a word (circumpolar is though). So, maybe before adding endings to words, double check that the word can have the ending you want.
 
Also, the sentence, “their countenance reflecting the window like a kiss” does not make sense. Countenance is a person’s facial expression so how could their facial expressions be reflecting a window….? Maybe you could change it to “their countenance reflecting in the window”
 
Overall, I think that your lyrics are really nice, though it may seem like I judged you harshly. You have a lot of potential~