A story I'm writing (No title yet X3) OKayyy READ IT :DD

[left]Uhm, hi everyone xD I have a story and I want to post it to see what people think, cuz I just need GOOD critisism!!!! D: Okay, so here's the first chapter. Which is honestly really short and boring. Sorry. xD

~Banako~

I stare out the port hole in my bedroom. The ship honks its horn. No one knows where we're going but The Captain and The Lady in Blue. When we ask her, her eyes turn to ice, she stares blankly ahead and says mechanically, "Why do you need to know?" She won't even tell us her name.

I guess I should explain who I am and why I'm here. My name is Banako Katoro. I'm barely twelve, and I'm being shipped away to some land with some other teens I don't know; of the two adults, one's always silent and the other lies half the time. My parents never really loved me, so they told me I was going on a nice ship with some nice people for a "summer camp". Liars.
The only good thing is that my best friend Rose is here, too, with her brother (who I barely talk to). There are two other kids here too.

The Lady In Blue appears suddenly at my door. "Banako." She says my name as if it's a fill-in the-blank space on a card. "We'll be there by morning, so get to bed."
I want to shout, "Where is there?!" But instead I say, "Fine." The Blue Lady gives me an icy glare and walks away. I shudder.

Rose comes in the room a bit later. She's one year older, taller, and has long, straight brown hair. I'm short, have longish, wavy, dark hair with blue edges.
"I can't wait to get off this boat," she whispers, sitting next to me on my bed.
"I know," I say. "The Lady in Blue scares me half to death." For a moment I feel like we're being watched.
"She's pretty, but her eyes... they stick to you like flypaper." She cringes in the blue darkness.
"Hey," I start, changing the subject, "where d'you think we're going?"
"I dunno," she replies. "I hope it's nice, but you never know." She crawls over to her bed. "Good night, Banako."
"Night," I call quietly.

I fall asleep fast.
I dream of The LADY in Blue.

ANY LAST THOUGHTS?: I have decided- The Lady in Blue is so not human!!

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So what'd you think? PLEASE PLEASE PLEASSSSE leave critisism. That's why I'm posting this!!

Its sounds creepy so far like a horror story. But rose and banako dont sound worried enough. Unless their not worried.......which i would assume is highly unlikely.