Re: [Youtube Chorus Project] Creating a song [Lyrics]

by Aelve Fri Jan 22, 2010 12:07 pm

Isn't it awesome? xD

Edit:
Full lyrics:

Spoiler:

...I'd like to know what everybody thinks. After all, we're all singing this song, right? It's okay if you can't write or compose, just say what you think. Thanks~! 8D
( We're also missing a sentence to sing in every language. Suggestions? owo )

by miyuki-haruka Sat Feb 27, 2010 8:06 pm

This part:

"Time has flown by and there comes you
You showed me sunshine and not just few
When we're together I always knew
I'll be singing this song from my heart with you"

is a little odd. XD;

How about:
"Time has flown by but you're still you
You showed me the sunshine that is our truth
And when we were together I always knew
I'd be singing this song from my heart with you"

???

by ReiYu Tue Mar 02, 2010 4:07 am

The song sounds great. =D The lyrics anyways. Maybe the extra sentence for the languages to say could be something like, Together we are the world/future, let's let our voices be heard. Something along the lines of that. ^^;

Also, I have an idea. At the end, we could either have a bit of instrumental, where there are sections where we could sing "thank you" in all the different languages at intervals, until it fades out. Either that or we could sing the chorus until it fades out, then we all say 'thank you' in all the languages at the same time, which will sound kinda chaotic, but fun and nice. In the background of this, there could be a little rap going on. I've noticed that th bridge makes a reall nice rap (I've tried), and we could tag a bit of English to the end of that for the 'ending rap'. I've got two lines to suggest. "Here we are in this world full of pain and sorrow; but ev'rytime the sun sets there is a new tomorrow". (Yeah, I'm still working on it...)

by Aelve Tue Mar 02, 2010 4:24 am

Yea, I've suggested that before :3 I think having everybody say "Thank you" in the end would sound nice and fun too~!

How about singing the bridge, and have some people rap it at the same time? (We'd add a few lyrics to rap then)
I guess everybody can go like FREESTYLE in the end xD

If you're still working on it, you can submit your lyrics here when you're finished >w< If everybody agrees, I'll add them to what we already have~! Thanks for helping, hehe.

by ReiYu Tue Mar 02, 2010 5:14 am

Yeah, I actually kinda built off your idea, just suggesting different ways we could do it, Aelve-senpai. ^^; Thank you! (Freestyle sounds fun. xD)

by Tsukiyo Wed Mar 03, 2010 3:43 am

It looks great so far and the ideas incorporated are rather genius, I think. Keep in mind though that whoever composes the song may have some difficulty keeping exactly to the finalized lyrics. Other issues may also come up, like harmonies, choruses in different languages and how it's going to work without sounding like a mishmash, etc.

All that lovely stuff. Meanwhile, we need some more songwriters, yo. If need be, I have a friend who composes beats, which could be helpful.

by Effyness Sat Mar 06, 2010 6:51 am

Oh. Hey there. o u o I've read over the lyrics, and they sound really nice! I agree with miyuki-haruka's edit, it does sound a bit better. Um, if we keep to these lyrics, then I have some small edits to suggest, just to make it sound more natural.

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The parentheses are where I added my own thoughts. Look over the edits, I tried not to change anything to dramatically, just trying to make it sound more natural. Sorry if someone doesn't like something. OTL;; But I really do like the song and the vibe it gives. It's very warm and welcoming and I love it. C:

by Kagamine_Len Sat Mar 06, 2010 6:58 am

Um, can we write the Russian chorus?

by Amilara Sat Mar 06, 2010 8:09 am

Kagamine_Len wrote:Um, can we write the Russian chorus?

We?Who "We" ?

by Kagamine_Len Sat Mar 06, 2010 8:13 am

me and you of course xD

by Caramel Sun Mar 07, 2010 4:01 am

Kagamine_Len wrote:Um, can we write the Russian chorus?

The chorus exists out of "you and me, we are one" in different languages.. so all you really have to do for the chorus is translate that into your own language (Russian in this case) :3

Also, there are still some languages missing in the chorus parts right? (or did I just miss them?

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by Effyness Sun Mar 07, 2010 8:32 am

Well, the lyrics look pretty complete, but I'm sure there are more languages the chorus could be translated into. Like Portuguese... *cough* *speaks Portuguese* c: It all depends on how many choruses the song will have, I guess?

by sakuratine Tue Mar 09, 2010 7:57 pm

I'm okay with the edited lyrics.! Happy

I hope this'll get finalized ASAP. sweet

I'm excited!! Woohoo! XD Hyper

by Tsukiyo Tue Mar 09, 2010 8:11 pm

BTW peoples, while we're finalizing lyrics and translating into more languages, think about what style song we want. Then the composing process can get started.

In fact, we need more songwriters.

by Guest Wed Mar 10, 2010 6:13 am

@everyone
Shall i open a new thread asking for people to play instruments? oWo

by Caramel Wed Mar 10, 2010 9:56 am

I think that would be useful, yes :3 Else we might get confused and stuff..

by miyuki-haruka Tue Mar 30, 2010 1:10 pm

@Luna: Yes, that would be useful.

Effyness wrote:Oh. Hey there. o u o I've read over the lyrics, and they sound really nice! I agree with miyuki-haruka's edit, it does sound a bit better. Um, if we keep to these lyrics, then I have some small edits to suggest, just to make it sound more natural.

I'm happy my edit is liked. :3 I really like how these lyrics are shaping up! Hyper

by Moonlight-KurochiMisa Tue Mar 30, 2010 1:49 pm

=D
I recorded a sample of what I think the song sounds like in my head. XD

by Caramel Wed Mar 31, 2010 3:45 am

I wanna hear it~! <3

by Ruriko Fri Apr 16, 2010 8:26 am

So are we singing this all in english and the chorus in our languages ?
:O

by Aeon Mon May 24, 2010 3:07 pm

hi hi~! is this topic dead and over with?
if noooot, is this the lyrics so far?

Spoiler:

Can whoever is translating the chorus lines put them into the lyrics just so that everyone singing those lines sings the same thing? 'cuz theres probly multiple ways to translate the same thing.

uhm.. this'd sound terrible in canto in my opinion.: Nay tong ngo, ngo day hai yut goa
D: feels like i shouldnt be translating it literally. or maybe add something after the "goa"
same goes for mando. Ni he wo, wo men shi yi ge
i think the feeling for the song is more like, "we are in the same mindset/heart" or "we have the same feeling" not what i translated it as.

MY SUGGESTION?
make a chorus that just splits into different languages. not the same line over and over translated, but something that'd make sense if you knew every language, but still makes sense without knowing all of them too. XD don't really know how to explain it. D:

i'm hoping this topic hasnt died..... and im actually typing this for people to read..

by Ruriko Mon May 24, 2010 9:29 pm

Where's VIETNAMESE ? *shot*

by Amilara Mon May 24, 2010 11:04 pm

And ruaasian..)

by Guest Tue May 25, 2010 10:24 am

Guys, I'll start moving my A@# after exams. Sorry OTL

by Akemi Tue May 25, 2010 11:02 am

@Aeon: for cantonese maybe it should be sort of like
我同你，一顆心
ngo tung nei, yat fo sam
you and me, one heart

somethign like that?

or maybe 我和你 (ngo wo nei) would sound more lyrical

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