Manga idea..(MINE)

Well, this was an idea i had about 3 years ago to make a manga.Tell me if it is good so i can draw characters and voice them. Its mostly like other romance/fantasy/ action/adventure mangas except that its somewhat sad. Here is a sample of chapter 1. I cant really phrase it in manga form but ill do it in novel form. It sounds weird. That might be because i made this when i was 10 or something. I had some help doing this too.Kinda.I didnt change anything. Everything here is the original.

This is called Naine. A world in the dead center of all worlds.Where most things can happen. For example, people here are mostly gifted with an animal parter called Faun(Fah-n). They transform into you so that you may inherit their powers. But a special bond must form between you and the animal before anything gets done. These animals are unusual.The elements give them their talent so that they may be used for humans. Every thing in this planet exists. Except for permenant death.Everyone is reborn into someone new whether they like it or not.Though the process takes years. We start here in the scenery in Japan of a normal human teen girl's room. Amasaki Nana's room.

'Naine Chapter 1: Strange Boy, Strange Secret '
I wake up.It's morning again. A usual hello by that annoying bird always waking me. Mom's calling for me downstairs nagging me to eat when i dont feel the slightest bit hungry.Thats one of my features.I dont need to eat every breakfast. I eat when i want to, depending on me. I sigh. Dragging me body across my huge room cant get any harder now. I feel heavy.My eyes are in rings of light purple.Maybe its because of the lack of sleep i got because of a dream last night of some random guy pulling me close to him leaning forward to steal a kiss when suddenly----he gets killed.Pity, too. he was cute.The peircing sword on this back stabs all the way so it almost meets my beating chest. I stared at the evil whiched killed him. The face. It looked so familiar.And just when i was about to identify the figure, i was interrupted. You know by who, or what i should say? That bird.That stupid feather ball ruined it. As always.

Im finally down the stairs right into the kitchen. i eat a usual breakfast of rice and stuff. Then i head back upstairs to get dressed in a uniform of a blue vest and white t-shirt a red bow and black kneesocks and skirt. then i brush my teeth and head out of the house.Just before, i said bye-bye to my mom. I walk to school. Passing all too familiar faces. Until i pass one of no name.Not at least to me. He was weird but at the same time cute. It looked as he wasnt from town. Everyone in my town had beautiful amber-brown haircolor. He, though, had a beautiful deep blue-ish color. That was not all. Just add a little purple and there. you have him . Though, what surprised me was, his blue eyes. I thought that blue eyes and blackish hair didnt both exist on one person! I could tell that he wasnt even wearing contacts! But they were so loving and sincere at the same time very serious and threatening. What scared me was that they were gazing on me with a loving gaze so warm and tender it was scary. I didnt even know him. though i knew he was from my school. He had the same uniform.

I got to class 10 minutes later. As i sat own in my regular seat i noticed, he was there. The strange boy from the street was there. Right next to me. Staring at me with the same gaze as before. And just about when iwas going to scream at him to leave, Ryota-sensei called him up. "This is Koreseki Haikito. He transfered here from the other part of Japan!" he announced. Right then, i heard his voice. " Everyone. Please treat me well" He asked in a calm, deep voice irresistible to all the girls in the class except for me. I was glaring at him. With a hateful expression only i know why im doing it. He reclaimed his seat right next to mine. Right by the window.

He raised his hand. "Sensei. can i open the window? Its getting stuffy in here." He blurted. Even before the sensei said yes, he was already there by the window opening it to its fullest extent, just enough for two humans to jump out. As he made his way back into his seat, he ran. In the speed unimaginable to humans to run from somesort of a standstill. As he was running, he grabbed my by the stomach and flung me over his back. Then as fast as he started, he jumped out out the window,which was 3 stories high, with me over his back, running to who knows where. i caught a glimpse of his face while running. He was grinning. The sort of gin when you were waiting for something for soo long then you finally got it.

He ran and ran until he found a huge hidden lake i hadnt known about until now.The place was covered in a dense forest surronding the perimeter of the lake. He placed me on a grassy area. And as he did so, he collapsed. On me of course. I felt his chest beat the fastest ive heared in a long time. It looked like he was dying. And when i was about to think he was, he opened his shut eyes and started laughing. "Its been long since i had ran like that." He whispered in my ear. I blushed. i had never felt the warmth of his breath against my ear before. Sure a lot of men have did that to me but that was because i knew them. I barely even knew this guys name! He stood up. " Inanae-hime, allow me to re-escort me to your throne." He said as he extended his hand towards me. My cheeks flushed red. I hope he didnt see. He smiled and pulled me up. Then and there. I didnt know yet but, I fell in love with a young man i never knew. And also, right then, was the start of my new life. The life i never knew about. until now.



Uhhh..the last part didnt make sense. Just to clear it up, it was the future Nana speaking. So yeah, How was it?Any ideas to improve it? Sorry i had to rush because my dad wasrushing me....sorry..Opinions?

Sugoi! OuO;

But isn't the part "Then i head back upstairs to get dressed in a uniform of a blue vest and white t-shirt a red bow and black kneesocks and skirt." a bit too long?

"Then i head back upstairs to get dressed in my usual comfy school uniform before i brushed my teeth and head out of the house -- ready to start the day."
That's only a suggestion, though! Not that it matters when you convert it into a manga..T^T

But seriously, your details are very cool~~ x3

Lookin' forward to see the charas!

Yayayayayaa~~Thank you...That is pretty good~ Im already starting the characters..Im going to put them on a website somewhere and probably post it in the arts part of the forums.


Thank yoou~

Yup, ganbatte yo~! xD

Ps: Yeah. I looovee the dotted line. lol~ Xb

Un. Arigatou!!Eh....Riku-san!


Ahahaha of course you do!Everyone does!

That sounds like a great idea!
So, does everyone have an animal or something? Like, if you walked across the street would you see a couple kids along with their animals or do they get there animals at specific times? Like, for example, at a certain age or if they find an animal that wont leave them alone? Then, eventually, build a really strong bond with that animal? That's just something you might wanna consider.... And who's the princess? She doesnt have the same name as Nana? Or is that like, some specail name?