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Sky's Translyrics

Post by SkySailor on Wed Jun 25, 2014 9:39 am

Hm... not sure how this works, but here I go :D
I sing English Vocaloid covers since I can't sing Japanese, so here's all my translyrics Razz

Aurorae ft. Hatsune Miku:




I remember all the times that we were together
And those memories I want to take them all back
My heart keeps shouting “I love you” forever and ever now
I still miss you, and I want to see you in this moment
I wish I could re-live the night once more
I want to stay right next to you forever, standing by your side

Every night the wind flows around me
Into this beautiful bright starry night
I can’t stop my worried thoughts
Since you no longer stand by my side

These endless dark nights are surrounded by stars
As I sing in harmony
I’ve never seen this brilliant night sky so clearly
This is the first time that I stare up alone

Since the day you were gone
I walked all alone and I had just thought
Would I ever be able to see you smile again?
So that’s why…

I remember all the times that we were together
And those memories I want to take them all back
My heart keeps shouting “I love you” forever and ever now
I still miss you, and I want to see you in this moment
I wish I could re-live the night once more
I want to stay right next to you forever, standing by your side

Beneath the tree in a wide-open field
There used to be two dark sillouettes
Looking up at the aurora
But here I am, with no one here

All of the sadness in me,
Made my tears overflow right then
When do you think that you will be back? How soon?

I remember all the times that we were together
And those memories I want to take them all back
My heart keeps shouting “I love you” forever and ever now
I still miss you, and I want to see you in this moment
I wish I could re-live the night once more
I want to stay right next to you forever, standing by your side

Soon enough, the stars will fade away into the light
The moon would give its final kiss goodbye to the night
And then the sun would slowly rise to the sky above
Then, the morning sun would shine down once more, igniting the sky

I remember all the times that we were together
And those memories I want to take them all back
My heart keeps shouting “I love you” forever and ever now
I still miss you, and I want to see you in this moment
I wish I could re-live the night once more

I want to look at tonight’s night sky
With you by my side here


Bring Back Summer ft. Hatsune Miku:




In the early light, I heard a soft sweet melody
As I held your hand it seemed to be our destiny.
The beautiful sky just surrounded us,
Below the clouds above.

We walked along the shore, a soft wind blew right by
The lovely ocean sight made my heart want to cry
That small smile of yours made my heart beat fast
My love, it all bloomed.
So I gave it to you.

The time passed us during that summertime
The sparkler slowly comes to an end and my chance
To say those words that I had tried to say.
Words just couldn’t express
And it came to an end.

I remember the faint scent of summer that carried on the wind,
But it still strongly flows all the way through my heart
I could never forget you, I will always be right here
How could you look so bright that day, waving “goodbye” to me?
I see the seasons slowly changing throughout the time after that
Remembering all those fun days that I had been with you.
One day I’ll go and see you before the season days are gone
Below the clear clouds from those days…

Bright shining light comes down from the deep blue sky
The ringing sound of pretty wind chimes calling out
A strand of your long hair flutters in the wind,
resting on your cheek

In that colored time, I see the longing within my gaze
Beating faster, my heart grew during our summer time.
The pulsing sound of it moved with the waves,
Making my heart clear
Below the blue sky…

We walked along the shore, the two of us
As the sun set, neither of us said a word
I can’t hold back the feelings I have for you.
I couldn’t look back
As they came to an end.

I remember the faint scent of summer that carried on the wind,
I had imagined another future of us back then
The scene that I had before only just a dream within my words
And they fade away in the summer blue ocean air
I see the seasons slowly changing throughout the time after that
Remembering all those fun days that I wished to spend with you
Then the summertime had ended and I was destroyed by your love
So I looked to the other side of the sky…

As the world keeps on spinning, my thoughts and memories are there
I want to reach you, I want to tell you everything
Somehow I know that nothing will change and it doesn’t even matter now
And my tears will overflow…

That faint scent of summer that is carried on the wind,
It still strongly flows all the way straight through my heart
I could never forget you, I will always be right here
How could you look so bright that day, waving “goodbye” to me?

I see the seasons slowly changing throughout the time after that
Remembering all those fun days that I had been with you.
By the end of that summer, I was destroyed by your love
So I looked to the other side of the sky…

I’m crying out to you!

Earth Day ft. Hatsune Miku:




Through the day I stare ahead, thinking of the stars that lie above
With all the stress piling up on me, I open my eyes and see
In front of me was a wide dark path, a path that wouldn’t be crossed so easily
The destiny you seek hasn’t left you here, it’s waiting for you there

There’s something crazy here that keeps our worlds apart, you and I
I can’t ever break free, so I remember the days now

Even though it’s “now” I still can’t reach where your world lies
Our voices they start singing that it’s our Earth Day
We drew our world out on a map, my heart shaking right then
But today is your and my, yes it’s our Earth Day

These gloomy thoughts circle in my head, they can’t escape, locked in their place there
No matter how much I try to fight, I can’t stand up right now
Hanging onto life by a tight thin thread, I know that I’ll fall and be crushed by gravity
This strong destiny won’t let up, but then it seemed to breathe

Thinking of you now is the only thing keeping me together
Please don’t hate me now, I’m watching over you somehow

Even though they thought us wrong, we didn’t look them in their eyes
Our voice they were were worn down but it’s our Earth Day
The world we drew was just for us glowing with eternal light
But today is your and my, yes it’s our Earth Day
We made a promise on that day, the day that we both parted ways
We promised that it’s our infinant Earth Day

I hope you hear my voice right there, even if you hear nothing
I will sing out, please hear it; please reach your Earth Day
I was made for you and here, you were made for me I hear
If we sing, look, together, yes it’s our Earth Day

Farewell Blue ft. MAYU:




As the sun falls beyond the stunning horizon now,
The answer that I had been searching for was right there in front of my eyes.
The time has come where I will throw away my old self and be reborn
If I looked back, only then, just one moment had passed

We’re all united here, together now
Understanding each other, we smile
Living honestly and carelessly in ways we didn’t know how

Like the blue in the sky, it burns so bright
The strong feelings in my heart now
They’re still there like the time hasn’t passed a day
Always there again and again
Softly sitting right here.

As the sun fades quickly, the sky blurs in my sight
I stand there calmly, my imagination wanders off to times of before.
There were fears and some doubts that existed in the shadows in the dark
But our dreams they were the same as before, yes they were unchanging back then.

No matter the dark clouds, or if it rains,
I can still see us drifting away
In the blinding space all of our own
We would always be together

Living with abandon, we cried our tears
Our emotions overlapping
"I’ll see you tomorrow, this is not the end"
I couldn’t bear to say those words then
But one day I will.

And here I’m all alone, I’ve lost you now
I don’t know what will come but now I’ll cherish it
Looking up at that sky, it’s not farewell, so we gaze up at the clear blue

The bonds between us here, they’ll never break
This moment will transform into the future that we’ll have
We’ll stand strong and tall
Forever together again

What will happen now?

From Y to Y ft. Hatsune Miku:




The path you left behind you, forgetting all the things we’ve been through
You didn’t even say goodbye to me
I don’t know what to think now, and like a small child I just cry out
Oh, please don’t go, just stay with me, don’t leave

The feeling that I couldn’t manage, the path I chose was damaged
I know I have to leave for my heart to heal
The face that you see me as, my happiness has turned to ash
Now I look like the strongest one, and gave up on my future (Future x5)
And now I’ll never get my wish (my wish x4)

This empty space I live within, I never knew how alone my world became
It seems that things will fall apart, I don’t know where to start
Now I only need one moment, just one second of your time
I want to stay with you again

How could this world be so cruel, denying all of my biggest hopes and dreams
Things just fell apart, I don’t know where to start
These small lies I tell will lead me to your tears
As I tell myself once more, once more, once more until I lose myself again
I want to hold your hand right now 
Be right next to you somehow, 
I don’t want to ever let go of your hand

As the time just keeps on passing, my memories just keep on asking
When will today be the same as it used to be back then
The me that you remember then, the one you said you won’t forget
Please just make it go away, forget about me

Can we ever go back to the times of before?
Is this all that there is for us?
Is this the start or end?

As night falls, I am asleep with no one here to hold me close like it used to be
It seems that I’m alone, dreaming on my own
I wonder if you think of our times together too
As I tell myself once more, once more, once more until I lose myself again
I want to hold your hand right now 
Be right next to you somehow, I don’t want to ever let go of your hand

I will carry on my pain and letting loneliness take me
So let me stay there in your dreams, standing next to you
I wish that we would meet again, be reborn in another world
Holding hands, let’s hold on tight
Until I must say goodbye

Hello Worker ft. Megurine Luka:




Before I even start to succeed in all my dreams, I want to become well known
By someone I could see their smile all of the time, not standing all alone
Can you even see that the answer couldn’t be calculated at this time?
I’m trying to run away from this unending play, this wall I cannot climb

It seems that I’m losing my mind and all because I’m being left behind
I wish that I could live the life that I love, maybe I should try
But somehow…

I don’t really know what I want to do?
I’m not even sure of what I can really do.
And these words always worry me until I cannot even stand
I don’t really know how long my clock will move
And I cannot forget, even if I choose
If there’s one thing I’ll change, I’ll live for today

I was always thinking about hiding and shrinking from the dull way of my life
I’ve learned and I’ve forgotten the things I once loved, so I tried to move on

Without expecting anything, there’s not a thing to expect from me
Their thoughts had seemed to slow, moving on my own
Maybe it’s my chance…
But tell me

What will I ever learn from this place?
And what is the cost from trying to be brave?
I’m searching for an answer but I still don’t have a clue
I don’t really know when the earth will end
Maybe I can forget my past only then
So if the world would stop, just give me today

It seems that I’m losing my mind and all because I’m left behind
Since when did I get right here? Hey, my vision began to clear
Without expecting anything, there’s not a thing to expect from me
My thoughts began to shape once more, maybe it’s the chance I’m waiting for
But somehow…

I don’t really know what I want to do?
I’m not even sure of what I can really do.
And these words always worry me until I cannot even stand
I don’t really know how long my clock will move
And I cannot forget, even if I choose
If there’s one thing I’ll change, just one thing I can change, I’ll live for today

Hoshi no Uta ft. Gumi:




A distant world beyond the stars and milky way,
Moving past is a comet that just dances away.
Just like that time before when the universe was made,
You’re so near, I can feel you when you just walk on by.

I want you, but I can’t have you.
Beyond that blank space, I’ll never reach you.
You’re so dear, and I want to keep you near.
I just want to meet you here.

You’re like a diamond in the night, shining with all your might,
As if a god had sent you and made everything right.
So silently, I’ll watch you for now,
Until you travel back and around.

Within the many wonders of the distant space,
Only your beauty can have a great shining grace.
Just as I realize this, you say that it’s too late.
I couldn’t do anything as this was your fate.

I knew that… you would go,
But that’s just how it is for those on the ground.
I wish that, you would always trust in me.
So I’ll be waiting for you here, forever, my dear.

My world is changed by the falling stars here.
What do you think of me?

There’s only an instant left for us before you leave.
Right now you’ll go, but back again you’ll be.
A hundred years, I will always be here.
My love will never change, my feeling will stay the same.

You’re just like a diamond in the night sky now.
We are both in different worlds, but that’s okay.
Because of that star, this is your song.
Traveling away, it plays

post-script ft. Gumi:




The time has passed, the year flew fast
Do you still think of before?
Our clock ticked on, I didn’t see
We knew it was time to move on

But to me, nothing’s changed
My memories are searching for you
Waiting now, here I am
I’m hoping for you to come soon

Here I am, wanting to see you again
Only an instant is all that I need
I cannot reach you, do you feel the same?
We are two distant stars

Here I am, wanting to see you right now
All of those times, I want them back but how
Is it still too late?
But I’ll make a wish to see you, please make it true

Sayonara ft. Hatsune Miku:




Echoing, I heard the sound of waves drifting far from me
The sky closed in around that time of memories and seemed to cry
We were so close, overlapping, but our shadows began to grow
Those happy days that would never end, I wish that they’d go on and on
It seemed that I was living a dream, this blank canvas was ripping at the seam
I closed my eyes and tried to breathe, painting this pure white dream of us

Even if it’s just a lie, I feel myself falling down
Still nothing has changed as I think about you now, I can’t let go

That gentle touch of your hand in mine, everything was so easy back then
I held too tight and it scattered away, it was almost as if we had never been
My world grew dark, this life of dull monochrome colors a work of art
Thinking of the “could-have-been”s, I wondered if our fragile bond would break?

Even if it’s just a lie, I feel myself falling down
Within the time that seemed to stop, my tears well up and still they flow

Do you still think of the promise we made, that dream we had of us before?
And here we are, you still look the same, seeing you now, you smile at me

Even if it’s just a dream, I feel myself falling down
Still nothing has changed as I think of you now, I can’t let you go

And as we part our ways, moving on, losing what we had and still I’ll sing:
"Goodbye, my love, thank you so much" I’ll walk forward without
looking back…

Sayonara, arigatou
Sayonara

Sunset ft. Hatsune Miku:




Walking in the middle of a crowd, the days seem to be the same as the last
The sunset is just like it was before in the days of the past
The only thing that I remember is the days I spent waiting for you
And now, by the end of the day, the warmth will fade only to be 
start anew

I wish that I could go away, leave everything and start a new day
The words that I will never say, they appear without a single thought
Everything that I hold dear, I thought that my world was so clear
It seems that I just can’t let them go, it was never part of the plot

And as for this sad little girl in a story book, she was colored like the light
With old rusted chains like these, it’s impossible to move on without breaking them free
I will shake off the past from me and forget my yesterday till now
Ah, this gentle wind will lead me to my happy ending here

I still have those times when I can’t breathe, the time seemed to be frozen for me
No matter what happens right now, I won’t let fate trap me somehow
This is the end of the play, I’ll fall into the evening sunlight, 
Until I fade into the night, the bright colors will set me free

And as for this sad little girl in a story book, she was colored like the light
With this old broken shattered sword in my hand, there won’t be a path to victory
I will push through this troubled time, and walk in to tomorrow
Ah, this gentle wind is concealing the tragic ending for me

It seems that these silent days go on and never end, repeating again
Magical times, I’m done waiting for them to save me

The sky standing before my eyes, the sunset leaves me and the world behind
It hides behind the horizon, don’t worry you’ll be back again
If somehow my world seems to be missing you and starts to feel incomplete,
Then I’ll just come to you no matter what, even if the road is steep

And as for this sad little girl in a story book, she was colored like the light
With old rusted chains like these, it’s impossible to move on without breaking them free
I will shake off the past from me and forget my yesterday till now
Ah, this gentle wind will lead me to a lovely ending

Tell Your World ft. Hatsune Miku:




There's no way I can ever lose the times that I got to spend with you
So let's delete the past and see our feelings be reborn anew
I know now that it's me who'll sing and write all of my secret songs
Those words that hid away, I'll let them go forth and throw them up
into the blue sky

With all these different things I want to tell you
There's all these different things I wish that you knew
I hope that they'll line up and make pathway
And find their way somewhere out there

With all these different words I want you to hear
I hope now that this song will make it all clear
It seems that both our thoughts have come together
Bringing us together here, let's tell them everywhere! Ah

This bright light that I see, it's clear and nice, it kind of resembles you
I felt it falling through my fingers, slipping out towards the blue
It made my body move, my hand tapping along with a soundless beat
That beat inside myself, I let it go forth and throw it up into the heavens

With all these different things I want to tell you
There's all these different things I wish that you knew
I hope that they'll line up and make a pathway
To a place somewhere they can reach you

With all these different words I want you to hear
I hope now that this song will make it all clear
It seems that both our thoughts have come together
Bringing us together here, let's tell them everywhere! Ah Ah

As I'm dancing through these unchanging days, clarity piercing
through the haze
A thought started moving through my head that this day was a gift for us
The sound that made me see, it made me believe
It shook and made my whole world free
Will you tell me now? Come to me now and tell your world

With all these different things I want to tell you
There's all these different things I wish that you knew
I hope that they'll line up and make pathway
And find their way somewhere out there

With all these different words I want you to hear
I hope now that this song will make it all clear
It seems that both our thoughts have come together
Bringing us together here, let's tell them everywhere! Ah Ahh Ah


Tower ft. Megurine Luka:

The pain in the sky all came down from the big black sky,
It colored the paved road that was set on the earth.
The pain and all the tears could just pierce all through me.

Nightfall had came and I gave up the love in me.
I climbed a tower and came to the top
And the sight before me was a beautiful sight.

Eternal bunches of lights before me,
And the glow, seemed to sink into the night.

If I vanished from the face of the earth,
Killed myself and let me die alone.
As the stars are all so alluring, they burn so bright.

And no matter how I try tonight,
If no one else is looking at the sight,
The tower that was on the ridge of a hollowly gentle town…

Back then, no one would ever try to hear me out.
I faded deep into the hole of my heart.
That night I dropped from the air,
I came alive again.

I’m helpless, I can’t do anything this time.
I won’t change because it’s always been this way.

If I vanished from the face of the earth,
Killed myself and let me die alone,
I would hear your whisper in my ear, you’re always there.

And when I’m all alone with no one here,
You do your best to try and stay with me.
Standing together on top of the tower, always your here.

If I vanished from the face of the earth,
Killed myself and let me die alone,
As the stars are all so alluring, they burn so bright.

And no matter how I try tonight,
If no one else is looking at the sight,
Right now I just want to be alive.

I will never lose this part of me,
And when I’m all alone with no one here,
I would hear your whisper in my ear, you’re always there.

When I can’t seem to find myself,
You do your best to try and stay with me.
On top of the tower that reached to the skies,
And stands up on the ridge of a hollowly wonderful gentle town


Umbrella ft. Hatsune Miku:


(workin on video)

~~~

Standing here, I waited for you, drowning in the unending rain
The cold slowly seeped into my heart, repeating the the sound of my pain
We were both so connected, united together, we knew each other like we knew ourselves
The tears within me all streamed down my dry cheeks
I’ll cry out until my voice grows ever weak
For as long as you’re here, all my sadness disappears
Will you hear me out before you turn into the air?

I can still feel your hand in mine, missing the warmth that you provide
It’s still there, the pain in my heart, then I think that I’ll never survive
I can never forget the love that we both shared, the memories that couldn’t even compare
No matter what I wish for, I know that you won’t be there
Why can’t I smile once again? I want it to be like it was before
Don’t leave me behind, I’m still back here all alone
I keep crying in this place, all my tears just overflow

I know I tried, but I couldn’t say “goodbye.”
The very thought made me think that I could not let you go
The real last image of you that I saw,
I still hold it and then I cry.

I still remember the days that we were together.
As I think about us, my heart starts to hurt once more.
My heart cries out your name, I fear I’ll never love again
So now I will sing, giving you all of my love and my pain
And here I cry until my voice grows ever weaker
Before you go away, I want you to hear my song
After that I’m at peace and now it’s time for sleep

(Ooh…)

…and I will wish to meet again…

Wrinkle ft. Gumi:



Looking back on the years that have passed of pictures in a book,
It seems like both of our lives became intertwined
Back to a time, so long ago, just like a fantasy
I thought that I couldn't ever love someone then, but...

Knock!
Did you see?
That you were the one who went and opened that door, there
You opened my heart

Remember, as our wrinkles keep growing one by one each day
Let's have fun, let's look to tomorrow once more
I'll just laugh and spend time with you
So, every time our wrinkles keep on growing
You seem a little bit happier than before
I hope you'll always be smiling
So let's just let nature take its course

Looking back on the years that have passed of pictures in a book,
It seems like both of our lives became intertwined
"One day, I will pass away, please promise that you'll smile"
That's what we promised that day, do you remember? Then...

"Please marry me!"
Getting down on one knee, I pull out the box with a ring
You make me happy!

Remember, as our wrinkles keep growing one by one each day
The sky turns and burns out a soft glow that's warm now
All my tears start overflowing
So, every time our wrinkles keep on growing
There's no taking, no giving, nothing like that, ah...
As long as we're still together
I hope that this feeling never ends

If we're really honest though, we know that things will have to come to an end
But there's no way that we can turn back the time to before
So let's promise again, just one more time
Remember... 
(Remember)

Now it's time, the day has come that we must part
Laying down, your wrinkled hand reaching out to mine
And it seems that it time to say our goodbyes
I remember, you were crying like a child then
But just like you promised you still seemed to smile
I looked you in the eyes and told you,
"I've never seen you so beautiful"

"You know, you make me so happy!"
And as you said that, I close my eyes


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Re: Sky's Translyrics

Post by Aerlith on Wed Jun 25, 2014 9:59 am

...So many! Joker might have competition soon! XD You've done a good amount so far! I'm not super familiar with a lot of the songs.

I would recommend posting your videos that you have covered already with the lyrics, too, so people have a guide. c:

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Re: Sky's Translyrics

Post by SkySailor on Wed Jun 25, 2014 10:03 am

oooh! okay :O
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Re: Sky's Translyrics

Post by SkySailor on Sat Jun 28, 2014 11:06 am



There's no way I can ever lose the times that I got to spend with you
So let's delete the past and see our feelings be reborn anew
I know now that it's me who'll sing and write all of my secret songs
Those words that hid away, I'll let them go forth and throw them up
into the blue sky

With all these different things I want to tell you
There's all these different things I wish that you knew
I hope that they'll line up and make pathway
And find their way somewhere out there

With all these different words I want you to hear
I hope now that this song will make it all clear
It seems that both our thoughts have come together
Bringing us together here, let's tell them everywhere! Ah

This bright light that I see, it's clear and nice, it kind of resembles you
I felt it falling through my fingers, slipping out towards the blue
It made my body move, my hand tapping along with a soundless beat
That beat inside myself, I let it go forth and throw it up into the heavens

With all these different things I want to tell you
There's all these different things I wish that you knew
I hope that they'll line up and make a pathway
To a place somewhere they can reach you

With all these different words I want you to hear
I hope now that this song will make it all clear
It seems that both our thoughts have come together
Bringing us together here, let's tell them everywhere! Ah Ah

As I'm dancing through these unchanging days, clarity piercing
through the haze
A thought started moving through my head that this day was a gift for us
The sound that made me see, it made me believe
It shook and made my whole world free
Will you tell me now? Come to me now and tell your world

With all these different things I want to tell you
There's all these different things I wish that you knew
I hope that they'll line up and make pathway
And find their way somewhere out there

With all these different words I want you to hear
I hope now that this song will make it all clear
It seems that both our thoughts have come together
Bringing us together here, let's tell them everywhere! Ah Ahh Ah
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Re: Sky's Translyrics

Post by SkySailor on Wed Jul 02, 2014 2:24 pm



Looking back on the years that have passed of pictures in a book,
It seems like both of our lives became intertwined
Back to a time, so long ago, just like a fantasy
I thought that I couldn't ever love someone then, but...

Knock!
Did you see?
That you were the one who went and opened that door, there
You opened my heart

Remember, as our wrinkles keep growing one by one each day
Let's have fun, let's look to tomorrow once more
I'll just laugh and spend time with you
So, every time our wrinkles keep on growing
You seem a little bit happier than before
I hope you'll always be smiling
So let's just let nature take its course

Looking back on the years that have passed of pictures in a book,
It seems like both of our lives became intertwined
"One day, I will pass away, please promise that you'll smile"
That's what we promised that day, do you remember? Then...

"Please marry me!"
Getting down on one knee, I pull out the box with a ring
You make me happy!

Remember, as our wrinkles keep growing one by one each day
The sky turns and burns out a soft glow that's warm now
All my tears start overflowing
So, every time our wrinkles keep on growing
There's no taking, no giving, nothing like that, ah...
As long as we're still together
I hope that this feeling never ends

If we're really honest though, we know that things will have to come to an end
But there's no way that we can turn back the time to before
So let's promise again, just one more time
Remember... 
(Remember)

Now it's time, the day has come that we must part
Laying down, your wrinkled hand reaching out to mine
And it seems that it time to say our goodbyes
I remember, you were crying like a child then
But just like you promised you still seemed to smile
I looked you in the eyes and told you,
"I've never seen you so beautiful"

"You know, you make me so happy!"
And as you said that, I close my eyes
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Post by sonic-nancy-fan on Sat Nov 08, 2014 11:26 pm

I listened to From Y to Y, Sayonara, and Tell Your World since I actually knew those songs. It often sounds like you are out of breath. I am not sure how much you are recording at one time but maybe you should try recording in smaller parts.

Your From Y to Y lyrics seemed to have too many syllables occasionally.
EX:(Posting it messed up the spacing, sorry Crying)
and like a     small chi    ld  I       just cry out
ko  do  mo     no   you   ni  sa     ken da

EX:(Still messed up  Puppy Eyes )
Now   I   look  like the  strongest     one,and gave up  on  my fu  ture
Tsu   yo ga     tte  te   bana          shi   ta   ri      sou no mi  rai

Sentence one could be fixed by removing ‘just’.
Sentence two not only has an extra syllable, it also does not make sense. The way the sentence is worded makes it sound like you gave up on your future because you are the strongest one. I think it should be reworded to something like: “Though I may look like I’m strong, I gave up on my future” That fits the syllables and sounds more accurate.

Your Sayonara lyrics seemed left a few syllables out
EX:( Yep, still a problem  Sweat)
Those happy days that would never end, I     wish that they’d go on and on
Na       nige   na     i       ma  ini      chi  ga    ei    en     ni     mo o   mo  e  ta

Ex:(I have determined that it just is not going to space right  LostSoul)
Even  if    it’s just a   lie, I   feel my self fall ing down
Yasa  shii  u   so  de  mo ki   mo chi ha   yu  re   ru      no

For sentence one, just change the ‘they’d’ to ‘they would’
For sentence two, just change the ‘it’s’ to ‘it is’.

For Tell Your World, there were not any syllable issues that I saw but I did not check the whole song. However, there was an ‘a’ missing from your lyrics.
EX:
I hope that they'll line up and make pathway
Should be: I hope that they'll line up and make a pathway

There is a tense error.
Ex:
I let it go forth and throw it up into the heavens
-To be able to say ‘let’, you would have to change ‘throw’ to ‘threw’
I think that leaving it as ‘let’ sounds odd. I think it would sound better if it were written like this: “I’ll let it go forth (I would change ‘forth’ to ‘on’ personally) and throw it up into the heavens

For both of the lines:
throw them up into the blue sky
and
throw it up into the heavens
-Maybe you should change it to not say ‘throw them/it up’. Since that can also mean vomiting, saying that you’ll throw the beat and words up into the sky/heavens sounds awkward.

I noticed that parts of your Tell Your World lyrics rhymed yet other parts did not. Either chose to rhyme or not; having some parts rhyme and others not makes your lyrics sound confused.

You have a nice voice, but it sounds like you are recording the song in one take. I am not sure if you are or not, but if you are, stop and record in parts. If you can time your singing to the song as close as you do then that probably means that you have some recording software that would allow you to record in parts. If you are not recording in one take, then just record in more parts so you can catch your breath. If you record in parts, I think that you can become a great singer~

P.S. As I was finishing my feedback, I noticed that your Wrinkle lyrics are missing ‘d’
EX:
And as you said that, I close my eyes
-Should be: And as you said that, I closed my eyes


Last edited by Aerlith on Mon Nov 24, 2014 8:14 am; edited 1 time in total (Reason for editing : +1 for basic feedback, +1 for basic feedback, +3 for in-depth critique, +3 for in-depth critique.)

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